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(Frage) beantwortet  | | Datum: | 18:06 So 11.11.2007 | | Autor: | viva |
| Aufgabe | | Ich habe diese Frage in keinem Forum auf anderen Internetseiten gestellt. |
Also ich habe am Mittwoch meine Eurokom...
könnte mir bitte jemand diesen Text korrigieren?
Und 1 Frage noch ... wie spricht man den 31th oktober in englisch aus?
DER TEXT:
Halloween
I choosed halloween, because i wanted to talk about a holiday and my friend advised me that this a easy and interesting topic for the eurokom is.
Well!
Halloween is an old custom, that the irish people celebrate on the night of 31th october.
Later they carried the celebration to North America. Some people suppose that Halloween comes from the celtic, because on the 31th October they also celebrated Samhain.
The celtic used to trust that the ghosts can communicate to the people on Samhain.
The word Halloween means usually All Hallows Evening.
But Halloween has a lot of critic.
The evangelic doesnt like Halloween because it represent Satanism.
And its just profiteering. The people buy more Halloween Products for example pumpkins and sweets.
Since 1990 some of the germans also celebrate Halloween.
The little kids wear magical and scary customs. Some of these costumes are ghosts, witches,
zombies, black cats, spiders and monsters. The customs are scary because theyre frighten the dead . The kids went to some houses and knocking at the doors. Then theyre saytrick or treating.
The children play tricks on them, if the people dont give sweets.
Sometimes they bedaub letterboxes and doors with eggs . Actually cars are getting damaged.
On Halloween the people carve spooky faces in the pumpkins, so theyre scare the bad ghosts.
The pumpkins originated in mexico about 9000 years ago.
Pumkins weigh from 15 until 30 pounds.
The traditional colours of Halloween are orange and black.
Black symbolizes the night, witches, black cats, bats, and vampires.
Orange the pumpkins, fall, and fire.
Okay I hope you enjoyed it!
DANKE!
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(Antwort) fertig  | | Datum: | 20:14 So 11.11.2007 | | Autor: | Ailien. |
Huhu =)
Also erstmal das Datum: thirty-one(th) of october. Das th muss erklingen ;)
So nun zu deinem Text:
I chose (choose, chose, chosen) halloween, because i wanted to talk about a holiday and my friend gave me the advise, that this is an easy and interesting topic for the eurokom .
Well!
Halloween is an old custom, which celebrate the irish people in the night of the 31th of october .
Later they carried the celebration to North America. Some people suppose that Halloween comes from the celtic, because on the 31th October they also celebrated Samhain.
The celtic used to trust that the ghosts can communicate to the people on Samhain.
The word Halloween means usually All Hallows Evening.
But Halloween gets a lot of critic.
The evangelic don´t like Halloween because it represent s Satanism.
And its just profiteering. The people buy many Halloween Products for example pumpkins and sweets.
Since 1990 some of the german also celebrate Halloween.
The little kids are wearing magical and scary customs. Some of these costumes are ghosts, witches,
zombies, black cats, spiders and monsters. The customs are scary because theyre frighten ing the dead . The kids are going to some houses and knocking on the doors. Then theyre say ing trick or treating.
The children play tricks on them, if the people dont give sweets.
Sometimes they bedaub letterboxes and doors with eggs . Actually cars are getting damaged. (schöne Satzkonstruktion  )
On Halloween the people carve spooky faces in the pumpkins, so theyre scare ing away the bad ghosts.
The pumpkins originated in M exico about 9000 years ago.
Pumkins weigh from 15 until 30 pounds.
The traditional colours of Halloween are orange and black.
Black symbolizes the night, witches, black cats, bats, and vampires.
Orange the pumpkins, fall, and fire.
Okay I hope you enjoyed it!
So dann viel Glück am Mittwoch =)
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(Korrektur) kleiner Fehler  | | Datum: | 23:55 Mo 12.11.2007 | | Autor: | rainerS |
Hallo, mir sind noch zwei Kleinigkeiten aufgefallen:
> Halloween is an old custom, which celebrate the irish
Da sind Subjekt (the irish) und Objekt (which) ein bischen durcheinander geraten.
Besser" "which was originally celebrated by the Irish people"
> The little kids are wearing magical and scary customs.
Schreibfehler: "costumes", nicht "customs". Im übernächsten Satz nochmal.
Viele Grüße
Rainer
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